- The biggest concerns that I had when completing my draft was 1) Did I establish enough of my opinion instead of just using an opinion of one of the authors and 2) Did I organize my paper in a manner that was easy to read and one that made sense. To start with the opinion part, I built off of what Delpit had said in her piece, essentially disagreeing with Gee’s two main theorems and providing examples of the evidence. I agree with Delpit, but for the average reader, it might just seem like I am using Delpit’s ideas instead of creating my own. Secondly, with the organization aspect, I worried that my paper was too much like a Jordan section, Delpit section, and Gee section, and I want my paper to flow better than that.
- My peers liked my claim, showing what “my paper was about” as Mason put it. I also thought that my peers like the quotes that I used. Alyssa said I did a “great job picking out this quote from the text” which made me very satisfied with my paper. I also read that Mason liked my transitions, calling them “smooth”. As a whole, the comments I got from my peers were very encouraging.
- I’m actually working best with Gee by disproving him. I used him plenty in the early stages of my paper to lay the groundwork for his ideas and what they were, and by quoting him directly allowed the reader to be introduced to discourse.
- I am working best with Jordan towards the end of my paper. I used quotes and stories from her paper to disprove two of Gee’s theories. I would like to try and implement her to flow more throughout the paper, instead of just sitting at the end.
- One of my biggest challenges with my texts is first the relationship my paper has with Jordan. I don’t explain her stance initially, so the work that can be done, as Mason quoted, is to “develop a quote on the intense opposition to Black English” essentially meaning that I left out key points that would be easy for the reader to understand. My next piece of work that can be done, again from Mason, is adding in more information and quotes from Gee in the early stages of my article. As I mentioned earlier, I need to do a better job explaining what discourse is to the reader, rather than just introducing it, so being able to introduce a quote that shows the relationship between Delpit and Gee would be extremely beneficial.
- My overall perspective with my paper is that I agree with Delpits claims that Gee’s theorems (not being able to be taught discourse in the class and that women and minorities are at a disadvantage) are wrong. I could strengthen this by separating myself from Delpit, while remaining similar with my viewpoint.
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